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Re: Distant Lies - Chapter 1
Hi Nepo!! I'm Dianne and I'll be your reviewer today. How exciting! ‘Huh, where am I?’ I thought, looking around my surroundings. This starts off wrong because when a person ...
May 28, 2010 -
Re: (also deleted)
Hey Jackle, I'm back. Um, let me see... This post has a problem that you usually have in other posts of this story. Basically, you're rushing through the story again. ...
May 15, 2010 -
Re: (deleted)
Hey jackle!! Sorry it took me so long to get to this, life is uber busy at the moment. Anyway, on to the review!! Okay, first, I'm going to go ...
Apr 22, 2010 -
Re: deleted
Well, jackle, you really have an active imagination. To be honest, I loved this piece and I think it's the best one you've written. The first line caught my attention ...
Mar 30, 2010 -
Re: deleted
Hey jackle!! Here I am, just as promised!! So let me start by saying that this was very interesting and the events really are helping moving the story along, which ...
Mar 26, 2010 -
Re: deleted
Um, this seems like a good start. But I'm not completely sure about it. The beginning is confusing with the family arguing and the Russell guy totally messing up the ...
Mar 21, 2010 -
Re: The Secret Goldfish
To tell you the truth, I was seriously confused when I read it. But I loved it. Especially the name of the title. By the way, my name's Dianne. :). ...
Mar 21, 2010 -
Re: The Last Cry Of Crime (Prologue)
My God. I love your word choice. Which means something because word choice really isn't my thing. Anyway, I'm pretty sure I've never met you so Hi, I'm Dianne! :smt001 ...
Mar 2, 2010 -
Re: Beware Doll, You're Bound to Fall
Hello Attolia, welcome to YWS! I really like this piece, it's very interesting. First, I want to point out that you did indent it alright, it did work, just so ...
Feb 27, 2010 -
Re: Ode to Snoink [We are]
Ha ha, I just absolutely adore this poem! We are warriors with marshmallow armor and black licorice boots Favorite line ever! I imagined everyone in our group wearing marshmallow armor ...
Jan 7, 2010 -
Re: Life's Whisper
Hi Jasmine!! Welcome to YWS! My name's dianne!! Okay, let me get started. I. Nitpicks It's laughing when nobody told a joke It's singing when there's no song It's taking ...
Jan 7, 2010 -
Re: What have you done?
This poem intrigued me. I like how every line consists of a question. More specifically, I like that the questions are never answered. It just consists of hypothetical questions. It ...
Jan 6, 2010 -
Re: For You
I like this poem a lot. My name's dianne by the way. I love the metaphors you used to describe what people saw the speaker as and what the speaker ...
Jan 6, 2010 -
Re: This is it.
Wow, for such a short poem i found myself completely interesting in the few lines. My name's dianne! Hi! You write amazing poetry! The way you can make I semi ...
Jan 6, 2010 -
Re: 40 Winks
Hello, Palantalid! My name's dianne, just so you know. This poem was very interesting. I didn't understand most of it because it sounded very disjointed. Like the part about the ...
Jan 6, 2010
